
The causeway extended across the fen into the mist.
“You can see how Alfred the Great escaped the Romans here,” Jane said.
“Vikings,” I said
“What?”
“Alfred escaped Vikings, not Romans.”
A gust of wind lifted the fog’s cowl. At the exact vanishing point of the causeway, the afternoon sun kindled fire in a pyramid.
“I don’t think we’re in Kansas anymore, Toto,” I said. “We should go back, Jane. Now. Or we’ll miss tea.”
She raised her ray gun. “That’s okay. Phasers on stun.”
Hand in hand, we marched forward into the white pre-world of possibility.
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Dear Neil,
I live three miles from the Kansas border. 😉 Two to beam up, Scotty. I enjoyed the crisp dialogue. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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It’s writing, Captain, but not as we know it
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“A gust of wind lifted the fog’s cowl.” I love that line. Beautiful writing. Armed with phasers, what could possibly go wrong?
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Thanks so much
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White pre-world of possibility – love that!
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Thanks
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I like the idea that somewhere in the future, out there in the universe, people will still be quoting ‘The Wizard of Oz’! Good stuff, Iain
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Thanks Iain
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Agreed with Rochelle, nice dialogue at work here.
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I saw two children with great imaginations, playing.
Yet with the fire in a pyramid, which I liked, now I not so sure.
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Yes, two children is what I had in mind. But stories take on a life of their own, so I’m not so sure either
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There could be two children playing, or a world of sci-fi and fantasy possibilities. Either way a very entertaining and imaginative read, Neil. Nicely done 🙂
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Or maybe there isn’t that much difference between the alternatives?
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🙂
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I like all the interpretations people have come up with here, and want to second Iain’s pleasure that people in the future are still quoting from Oz. Like what you did with the “pyramid” too.
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Thanks …. we’re off to see the Wizard, the wonderful wizard of Thebes
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An entertaining read.
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Thanks Sandra
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Intriguing piece, Neil
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Thank you
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that hint of humour cranked it up another level, great little piece 🙂
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Thanks Helen
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Something for everyone in here…lol.
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Thanks Paul
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Nice dialogues. Like the ..”fog’s cowl” – it’s an interesting image 🙂
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Thanks
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Time travel with just a few words. Genius!
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Now time travel is something I hadn’t seen in that at all. The Pyramids (in my mind) were in theirs
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Great takeoff on Star Trek,Neil. They probably couldn’t be farther from Kansas. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thanks, Suzanne
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A very adventurous story well written.
She’s bold.
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Thanks
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I can feel a fun-filled adventure waits ahead. 😀
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Perhaps. But they’ll miss tea
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Great piece with wonderful dialogue and description. Who cares about tea when there’s exploring to be done? 🙂
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Exactly!
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Great possibilities for imagination!
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Thanks so much
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Don’t you just love kids. This is great. Loved it
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Thanks
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You captured that moment and my imagination with precision. Well done Neil.
Tracey
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Thanks so much, Tracey
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Playful piece full of possibilities. Having a hand to hold is always reassuring – and a phaser might be handy.
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great pieace. one of the best i’d read.
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Thank you so much
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I agree with the others on the possibilities of adventure and imagination! Maybe when they grow up the kids will be best-selling novelists(and in Friday Fictioneers!)
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I confess, I had never heard of phasers before, but good old Google…! There are so many possibilities for this – great stuff.
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I didn’t know there was anyone who wasn’t a trekkie. Thanks Clare
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Ah, I used to watch it when I was a child, but that was a very long time ago!
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Yes, two children playing makes more sense to me, and more fun!
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