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Sound accompanied Yasmin’s days – sails creaking, gears clanking, and grindstones gnashing. Yasmin feared silence. Though the wheels inside her made no sound, sometimes she gritted her teeth.
“I’m not pretty,” she acknowledged to her suitor, “but I won’t sell myself cheap – I know the worth of my inheritance.”
“Silly girl,” said Damasos, and his mirth was like wind in sails. “Mills hold no interest for me. Our fate together lies in palaces far away.”
A Prince! As the soothsayer foretold!
Sitting together beside the hearth, old and content, Damasos laughed his laugh. “Did I actually say I was a Prince?”
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Interesting story! “Though the wheels inside her made no sound, sometimes she gritted her teeth.” I loved this line.
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Thanks, Jessie
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Me, too!
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Dear Neil,
When a woman’s in love, her man is always a prince. Very well written as always.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle
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Terrific!
Great story, and with a moral – every man is a hero for the woman he loves.
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you have a more charitable reading of him than I. The man’s a silver-tongued trickster
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A rogue’s tale! There’s one on every ship. Nicely rendered.
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Thanks so much
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Silver tongued trickster say you; but she has grown content and it seems lived a long life😊
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Silver-tongued rogues will do that for a person
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I’m echoing Michael on this one — he might have initially intended to defraud the miller’s daughter, but it sounds like it worked out pretty well for both of them!
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Don’t let Damasos hear you say that. It will ruin his reputation
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Ha ha, I’ll keep quiet!
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Once again, Neil, you got me with that great descriptive power of yours. Metaphors … LOVE ’em! That ending you supplied was great … how any frogs have we all had to go through?
Five out of five Blue Djinns.
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Thanks so much Wiliam
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😉
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I had a feeling he was a trickster! Well done, sir.
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You say that like it was a bad thing
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Perhaps he can still qualify as the Prince of Deception. But I suppose we can all fit that bill at different times. The hearts that hold out for the best can usually get tripped up by pretenders. I like this much Neil!
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Thanks Joe
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Great take on the prompt.
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Thanks, Sandra
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Never trust a soothsayer, or a man who promises you the world. Great take.
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Thanks Iain
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Oh sure…now you tell me!
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I prefer to think the important thing in all this is that they were both happy… To her, he was her prince.
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Doesn’t every woman adore a silver-tongued rogue?
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Absolutely!
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Well, that does sound like a fairy tale – The Prince and the Miller’s daughter. So glad they were content in the end, despite his fraudulent princley claims! Nice tale Neil
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He never did say he was a prince.
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Haha! Very true 🙂
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Nicely rounded tale. I chuckled on the last line I hope you don’t mind!
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I’m glad you did. It’s what it’s there for
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Who needs princes? All those royal duties must get tiresome! At least she is content with his mirth in her sails …
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That sounds saucy
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I still think he came for the money… promises only last as long as the dowry.
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He may be a rogue but I reckon she kept him in check. Nice imagery in this story Neil.
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Thanks, Thom
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Just perfection this week, Neil; love this one!
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Thanks, Dawn
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Loved this, Neil. I particularly liked your line: “Though the wheels inside her made no sound, sometimes she gritted her teeth.” This describes me so well. The wheels are always turning in my head. I also find that my role in our family has somehow become some sort of sponge where the rest hurl their bad moods and I’m expected to turn everything magically around and not respond most of the time. I understand the rest of the family has their stressors but they seems to forget that I am human as well with my own feelings and not some kind of robot. Then again, when I keep silent, how will that change? How will their awareness improve?
I am constantly reminding myself not to clench my teeth.
We’re about to leave for a family holiday to Tasmania where we’ll be shut in the car together much of the time. This could be interesting. I am already planning diversions.
Best wishes,
Rowena
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Thanks, Rowena. Good luck with the journey
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Thanks, Neil.
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Ha ha a great ending… well suited to each other I think.
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Thanks Laurie
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Made me think of Steven Erikson. From a few of your pieces it sounds like fantasy is somewhere you enjoy writing. It’s somewhere I also like to venture as both reader and writer. Happy New Year, and all the best for 2017.
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Interesting you should feel that Paul. I know why you’d think that but in fact I’m not a big fan of fantasy. I am though very interested in what might be called fabulism – exploring the tropes of fables
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Who needs an actual prince when he loves her for herself? Nice one!
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Thanks so much
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I’m glad she found her prince!
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Me too
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Wonderful descriptive writing on display liberally laced with some great metaphors. Master of deception, both you and your character. Loved it immensely, Neil
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Thanks, Neel
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The right one is always a Prince, no matter what.Nicely done as always.
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Princes are two-a-penny. Plausible rogues are much rarer animals
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Two a penny. Dangit. I got cheated 🙂
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I was charmed regardless of his intent. I’m smiling.
Tracey
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Thanks, Tracey
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I admire his powers of persuasion. I see he’s even charmed the majority of your female readers.
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The male readers too, it seems
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I’m worried what he has in mind for her. He hasn’t charmed me but the story has. Nicely done.
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Outstanding! There’s one reader immune to his charms! And I thought I’d created a perfect rogue
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I love the use of the actual with metaphor, like his mirth was like wind in sails. Very tightly written.
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Thanks so much, Michael
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Very intriguing. You have me wondering whether or not he was a prince. I guess not!
But then any man can be a prince if he knows to treat his wife as a princess!
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Most definitely not
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I’m not sure I would trust him???? Way too smooth. Enjoyed!
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Thanks, Roger
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Yikes! My evil villain alarm is going off!
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Oh no. An amiable and engaging rogue
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So he did turn out to be Prince in the end. A true Prince of Hearts! Nicely done.
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Thanks so much
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I liked this story very much. I bet she didn’t really believe he was a prince though, she was just saying that to flatter his ego 🙂
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Thanks, Jane. You may be right
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Good work Neil. I enjoyed the use of the metaphors reflecting the milling. And a happy ending too! The prophecy may have been wrong in the Prince part, but they did live happily ever after 🙂
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Yes they did. I don’t know what came over my usual curmudgeonly nature.
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haha! Don’t let it happen again 😉
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I liked the layers to the story and Yasmin remains a bit of mystery.
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Thanks Dahlia
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She imagined him a prince and a prince he became.
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A fun story! I like how he swept her off her feet with the line about palaces far away. Guess you never know.
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Thanks so much
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Prince Mindreader?
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