Friday Fictioneers – The Smoke That Thunders

PHOTO PROMPT © David Stewart

She was about to make one of her observations. “So cute! They call this the Smoke That Thunders, instead of waterfall. Primitive people are closer to the spirits.”

Nothing cowed her. Not even the river guide who’d asked if we were local. “No, silly,” she’d said, laughing. “We travelled here many hours in the great silver bird. Don’t you know your neighbours? Zimbabwe? Botswana?”

With great dignity, he’d reached down, pulled out a fish, and asked her the name. “No? Tigerfish. And this? Tilapia. Perhaps we all have our areas of ignorance.”

Atop the falls, I contemplated a little shove.


Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

47 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – The Smoke That Thunders

  1. Great opening sentence. Says it all. They’d probably lock you up for the shove so I’d just dump her pronto so she can meet and bond with another patronising bigot like herself. They’ll get on so well, it would be rude not to give her the chance.

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  2. Nobody likes know-it-alls, especially when they meet up with another know-it-all who knows more 😉 Her disrespect to the tour guide probably does deserve the contemplated shove though…

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  3. He doesn’t seem disturbed enough to follow through with the shove. Not worth the guilt even if not caught. A bit of ignorance is not that bad; at least, if we all admit we are ignorant in many areas of knowledge. Being “learned” is not a sign of non-bigotry.

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  4. I love the voices in this. I can imagine the guide listening to her ‘observations’ throughout, and his comeback is just perfect. He probably felt like giving her a shove too, but he’s got a much better strategy to put her in her place.Wonderful characters.

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