
The man who came back from space is upstairs dying. When Dad returned, there were medals, starbursts fireworks, and marching bands. He was war hero and celebrity rolled into one, and also my father. Some rubbed off on me – at school I got the girls.
But he never talked about it. Not to me, or anyone. He never did anything again and became more and more withdrawn, taking to his bed five years ago. Though I keep hoping he’ll tell me the secret of the stars, all he’s said is “fame’s not all it’s cracked up to be”.
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Dear Neil,
A beautifully painted picture of PTSD. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks so much Rochelle. I don’t know that I’d intended it to be PTSD so much as that the father suffered from a lack of meaning afterwards. But I like what you saw in it
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I simply adore the first line. Marvelous!
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Thanks so much
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The sad reality of achieving worldwide fame yet losing personal privacy and, eventually, the will to live. A moving story that subtly expresses the feelings of both father and son. It touched my heart.
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Thanks, EDith
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Excellent take on the prompt and expertly written. I think this is the way a lot of the astronauts who landed on the moon felt when they returned to Earth – what now? Great stuff.
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Thanks, Iain
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Superbly concise piece of work, Neil.
Terrific tale.
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Thanks so much
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Good stuff. It’s the career – sized version of Charlie Brown’s “post-Christmas letdown.” How you going to keep them down on the farm after they’ve seen Paree?
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Thanks so much
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Brilliantly done.
🙂
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thanks so much
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I think that being a hero is not easy afterwards… stardom is hard work.
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Thanks, Bjorn
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I sense something dark happened when he was in space. Interesting piece.
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Thanks Clare
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Awesome, Neil. I like to think of what maybe his dad saw up in space. This has workings for a very intriguing story.
Super job, man!
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Thanks, William
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This is a great story of one mans life in a nut shell. The lights reminded me of the night sky.
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Thanks, Michael
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Ok. So fame ain’t everything. And I guess neither is having your head in the clouds or sky or stars.
What about money?
Enjoyed the story – and enjoyed reading the diverse comments you got regarding the story
Randy
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Thanks so much
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I think he saw something up there, you know, in the stars. Perhaps it shocked him to the core and he was never the same again. Either that or perhaps mundane life was never the same again. That’s what I’m thinking.
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Yup, that’s what I’m thinking to.
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Cracking opening line, Neil! If that doesn’t draw the reader, I don’t know what will. A poignant and well written tale of sadness after glory. Well told, Neil
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Thanks so much, Lynn
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My pleasure 🙂
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All that glitters….Fantastic…and that opening line is simply stupendous!
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Thanks, Morgan
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It reminded me so much at my Grandmother. I asked her so often about the War and all the things she had seen. She didn’t tell me much, she kept it bottled up inside her and took it with her in her grave. Well done!
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Thanks so much
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It seems like sometimes after a person has done “great,” “normal” just doesn’t work. You captured that in this piece
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Thanks, alicia
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Beautiful and haunting. This is one that will stick with me. It’s amazing how this captures how one period of time in your life can change you forever.
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Thanks so much
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Maybe a hero can never really go home again.
Interesting to ponder.
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Thanks, TRacey
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It’s so sad that this seems to have been the highlight of his life and he couldn’t get happy with less afterwards. Or he really saw something. Luckily many of the ‘old’ astronauts are very active in promoting education and research. And then there’s Buzz Aldrin with his ‘Get your a… to Mars’ campaign. Uhm. tldr; Great story!
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Thanks so much
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Depression is often not recognized by even those closest to the person which can be deadly. It’s always sad. Good writing, Neil. —- Suzanne
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Thanks, Suzanne
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I like the various meanings that can be construed to this piece. A lot of meaning in so few words.
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Thansk, Mick
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So much there Neil. An excellent thoughtful piece.
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Thanks, Emmy
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I’ve always dreamed of mediocrity, and so far it hasn’t let me down.
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Thanks Russell
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wow. This reminds me of a piece from Bradbury’s Martian Chronicles. excellent writing!
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Thanks Melinda
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You’re welcome 🙂
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I love the connection of space, stars, fireworks, fame (lights again) all summed up in a beautiful piece!
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Thanks so much
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Excellent, Neil. Great first line, too. It took me right in.
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Very well written
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And this is why I only want to be a little famous. 😉
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