
With each day I am moving into the time before. I am becoming an ancestor. My limbs are frail and my breath comes heavy. Never again will I chase down a deer.
But the young ones sit at my feet and ask me “In your experience, how is this done?” And with every answer, they venerate me more. I move in a loop, catching up now and again with the era of my forebears.
Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here.
Sucks getting old (not that I know, but I listen). I imagine it can be like living in two worlds, the past and the present.
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So I imagine here, anyhow
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We are all our past, present and future. Only that future gets shorter with every passing day. Happy thoughts for a Wednesday morning! Well written Neil.
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Thanks so much, Iain
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Dear Neil,
Becoming an ancestor. Good line. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks so much, Rochelle
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Beautifully done, Neil!
Susan A Eames at
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Thanks so much, Susan
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Excellent premise. I like your fresh take on this.
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Thanks so much, Joshua
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The wisdom of the older imparted to the younger. Nicely done.
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Thanks so much, Colline
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Is it wrong to hope your transition to ancestor is as magnificent as the regard you hold for some that preceded you?
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Seems only fair to me
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The fact that youngsters ask him rather than their iPhones means he’s very special indeed!
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This is set in a fictional universe where people live by hunting. Also one in which the pace of change is such that old folks know anything worth knowing in the present day
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Getting old is a bitch, for sure. Love the way you’ve circled life here, though. A great story.
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Thanks so much
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Becoming an ancestor. . . .yes, for sure.I love your take on the photo, Neil.
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Thanks so much, Linda
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I love the way it becomes acceptable to age if you have listeners, which I think is so true… and to be the ancestor already in life is a good thing in a way.
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Yes, I think it may be a good thing too
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So followers are important in every society it seams. At least in your world, the revered seem to have earned the position. Nicely done.
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Thanks so much, Jo
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This was wonderfully done, Neil.
(You lost an ‘r’ In Your…)
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Thanks so much, Dale
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A society that venerates its most senior members is a strong society. I really like your story.
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Thanks so much, Jade
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You are welcome, Neil.
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This story brought back good memories of my Dad telling his life story to his grandkids (our sons). Your story made me smile.
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Then it did its work. Thanks, Mike
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There’s the cycle of life. The old have to teach the young so there’s someone to take care of them. The young have to learn from the old to take care of themselves. The young have to take care of the old so there’s someone from whom they can learn. Nicely told.
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Yes, I was thinking of the cycle of life. That’s well put. Thanks so much
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I am halfway there but the wisdom is still lacking 😉
Nicely done Neil.
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Thanks so much
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Aging … we just can’t stop it. Hopefully, we gain more respect.
Well done, Neil. I liked where you went with the photo prompt.
Isadora 😎
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Thanks so much, Isadora
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It comes to us all, but your narrator still has a place.
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That’s the nice thing about writing fiction. You can make anything be true
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Nice one, Neil, but in our modern culture age is often not venerated but mocked.
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Indeed. Technology and knowledge change so fast that the old have no useful skills to teach the young. Except maybe how to live a good life
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So true, time makes us wise old ancestors. Perhaps.
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Perhaps
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Life’s path as a line for the individuum, a chain that holds a culture together. Beautifully told.
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Thanks so much, for liking it and for seeing the chain
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I love that line – ‘I am becoming an ancestor’ – I am getting there myself!
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Thanks so much, Liz
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Well done, Neil. Sound like a school teacher, but I have kids and it gets ingrained into you. I really loved this line: “Becoming an ancestor.” I’m obsessed with history and in particular family history so that really resonated with me.
Best wishes,
Rowena
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Thanks so much, Rowena
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Ageing is a natural process. After sometime, one has to get out and make room for the next generation and share his experience.
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That’s what writing is all about for me – sharing my experience
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How lovely to be respected and remembered
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We can only hope for that
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i read somewhere that we season in time and then tend to reason in time. 🙂
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So long as it’s done in time
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You have got me thinking, dangerous that. 🙂
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I believe they intend to ban thinking so enjoy it while you can
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This is beautifully written, Neil. The circle of life as it should be.
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Thanks so much David
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Hoping that your decedents will think of you in a favorable way is what many of us strive for – Rarely does anyone want to be an ogre.
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Of course we’ll be dead so we’ll never know for sure
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A good story, Neil. I’m becoming an ancestor but I’ll have to do it by never having chased down a deer. It’s good to know our grandchildren listen to us better than our children did. Getting old is no picnic for sure. You make the best of it. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thanks so much, Suzanne. This is of course a fictional world. Your mileage may vary
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Lots of interesting comments provoked by this story! Interesting idea, that only in a fictional world would the old be perceived by the young as having anything of value to offer.
I think it is more likely that today’s youth has been distracted so much, by sparkly ideas and fools’ gold gadgets, that they may fail to recognize wisdom, which is truly worth its weight in gold. Which begs the question: what does wisdom weigh?
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Thanks so much, Andy. I’m not sure it’s so much that young people willfully ignore what the old try to teach them as that their world is so different that what the old try to teach doesn’t seem relevant
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Beautiful.
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Thanks so much, Dawn
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