Making the first mark is a terrible joy, an unforgiving test, he thinks. Until that act, the paper is a white pre-world of every possibility. Afterwards, passages form and doors clang shut. It is the moment when the hawk hangs motionless in the sky before it stoops for the kill. And the universe holds a stilled expectancy. The brush trembles in his hand.
The sitter adjusts her position. “Are you alright?” she asks.
He wipes a bead of sweat from his brow. What if I’ve lost it?
“Yes,” he says brusquely, and dips the brush into the vermilion.
Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here. Congratulations on your fourth anniversary as Friday Fictioneers Facilitator, Rochelle, and thanks. The blank prompt this week was a challenge and a terrible joy.
What a great way to respond. And what an amazing intimate story, I am blown away.
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Thanks so much
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That is an amazing take Neil 🙂 I was impatiently sitting here waiting for the prompt and you went and made the best out of the situation. Great!!
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I’ve always been very bad at waiting
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That’s brilliantly told Neil. Atmosphere, moment, emotion all captured succintly and evocatively
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Thanks, Michael
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Ha!, similar truth for the writer starring at a blank page. The story could be anything before you slash down that first sentence. Well done, Neil.
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Exactly, Russell. Thanks
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Dear Neil,
The prompt is up now. I’m not sure what happened but I appreciate your take on the prompt that wasn’t there. I know how your character feels…as an embarrassed FF Facilitator and as an artist.
Brilliant, sir.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Patience is a virtue, I was told as a child. I am without virtue, sorry
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No need for apology, Neil. I love what you did. I’m not sure what happened with the photo. I’m the one with the apologies.
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Ah, the panic of the blank page. If you build it, they will come. Nicely done.
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Thanks so much
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That was a great take on the prompt! Or non-prompt. As one who writes, I actually felt an empathic wave of near panic as I identified with your main character. Wonderful.
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I’m very pleased to have caused you near panice. Thanks, Sandra
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Yep, a great take on the prompt. This FF lark is becoming even more opaque.
Great comment on the first mark.
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Thanks, Patrick
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What an inspired response – love it. And don’t we all know how he feels, facing that blank page or the empty screen? Though of course, we’re lucky we can always press delete. Great story Neil.
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Never press delete. You have no way of knowing you’re right. If it’s not good, put it away in a drawer and leave it to mature. You may have something wonderful
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Yes, you’re right ot course, though sometimes I curse the clutter of short stories lodging in my hard drive, ones I keep meaning to do ‘something’ with and haven’t. 🙂
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Yes, I took one out today that I didn’t like a couple of months ago. It’s still not right but I think the opening line has something – “My death, sweet and sly as a lover, came for me.”
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A real tang of the Gothic, there Neil! A great atmospheric opener.
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I agree totally, Neil.
Throw nothing away, Lynn, there are no bad ideas, just some waiting to be further developed.
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Yes Neil I thought you were going to put pen to the blank page so you catch me out there and you have captured the fear of not being able to put anything on to that blank page, so well done.
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Thanks Yvonne
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This is so great Neil. You’ve captured so perfectly the terror of the blank page for writer or painter. But the only thing you ever do is ‘dip the brush into the vermilion’ and start. Wonderful.
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Making yourself dip your brush and start is this only difference between professionalism and amateurism. Thanks Claire
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Excellent, excellent work! You’ve so perfectly described what most of us go through every time we sit down to create. A masterful response to the non-picture.
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Thanks, Sandra
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Oh, beautiful, just beautiful.
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Thanks so much, Alicia
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White page phobia. We’ve all been there. Good story based on nothing 🙂
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Based on nothing? Or on EVERYTHING?
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Great story. It’s my main problem, always.
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Thanks, Indira
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Great take on the missing prompt! Funny how even though you think you have no idea what to do with the blank canvas, when you dip the brush in the vermilion, inspiration appears!
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Or at least you make your mark
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Clever piece on who and what we all are.
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Thanks so much
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One of your best Neil. Love the use of words and the way you interpreted a blank page. Brilliant.
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Thanks so much, Derek
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Great take on the ‘non-prompt’.
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Thanks
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Brilliant! and now I’m wondering what I’d have written if Rochelle hadn’t re-posted the photo!
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Thanks, Lizy
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“Until that act, the paper is a white pre-world of every possibility…”
I love that.
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Thanks so much
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Gorgeous moment of doubt and stillness. His fear is very real.
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Brilliant. My favorite line, which I feel captured the feeling best was ” It is the moment when the hawk hangs motionless in the sky before it stoops for the kill.” Love it.
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Thanks so much
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Such a clever title and a great story!
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Thanks, Edith
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Brilliant use of the non-prompt before the prompt. Love it.
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Thanks, Dale
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Speechless… this is fantastically good. The kind of writing I strive to build. Kudos!
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Wow! Thanks so much!
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Beautiful descriptions. I love them more than the story itself!
The poised-for-motion action is so btreathtaking!💐
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Thanks. There really isn’t much of a story
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Ah… I finally get to see it. I came late and got the photo, and wondered what all the earlier fuss was about. I would say your story is an excellent response to a white square, which is not a bad prompt, in a way. An artist with painter’s block. Nice.
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Thanks, Ted
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Brilliant. Just loved the first line, and then some more.
Please read my take on the prompt.
Your feedback would be much appreciated. Tks, Neel
https://neelwritesblog.wordpress.com/2016/10/29/neelwritesblog100wordstories02releasedphotoprompt-thewall/
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Thanks, Neel
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The blank page staring at the artist, a curse, and a magical moment. This is beautifully written.
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Thanks so much
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Great take–I’m assuming without the prompt. A lot of tension as you describe this moment.
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Thanks, Emily. Yes, the prompt wasn’t showing when Rochell first posted
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I loved how the image of the hawk hanging in the sky and the artist’s brush hovering over the blank canvas are linked…Brilliant.
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Thanks so much
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You’ve written a very relatable story.
Bravo.
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Thanks, Dawn
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So many thought-provoking ideas in this story. As another commenter has said, it applies to the writer as well as the artist. I like the idea of the doors clanging shut once the first mark is made, and the artist’s tiny moment of self-doubt and how it is managed. Wonderful.
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Thanks, Margaret
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Very well told Neil, you capture that Just Before moment perfectly, with its infinite possibilities and the doubt it causes
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Thanks so much
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