
They say we are never so much ourselves as when we’re wearing a mask. But what do you do when your mask is inside? I feel him slowly filling my skull, peeking out through my eye sockets, wriggling white in the pupal case that once was me.
He started innocently as a pen name. Then he became a younger, more active, version of me. He frequented trendy bars, and sprang lithe across the fells with his Borzoi hounds. Last night, he fucked my wife, and she screamed in pleasure.
I may have to take drastic measures.
Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here
I like this one, maybe you should let him stick around a little bit longer? Great story,
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Thanks so much. I’m entirely in Rochelle’s hands as to whether or not there’s a sequel
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The neighbours just heard me laughing! Brilliant.
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Thanks so much Jilly. And here I thought I’d written a tragic character piece
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Dear Neil,
Drastic measures are called for in certain situations.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle
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At least your wife is having fun!
But I understand, our alter egos have surprising potency sometimes.
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Thanks, CE
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LMAO with that comment – ha
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Nothing too drastic, I hope! It sounds like he’s having a lot of fun, albeit of a somewhat self-tortured variety
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Thanks, Siobhan
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Nothing like a little split personality disorder to liven up life!
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Us writers thrive on it
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I think he needs to write him out of the story. Things are getting a little too steamy. Some lovely images here, Neil. Not the last one, of course, she says, averting her eyes.
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Good advice. He’s inscribing a pentangle as we speak. Thanks, Sandra
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Wow, I love this! Really chilling.
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Thanks so much, Emily
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Hmmm. Yes. Interesting. Perhaps he should stop fighting the more spontaneous self and let him be born? It would be quite a good idea to have professional help while doing so…
Very intriguing story, Neil.
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Thanks so much, Penny
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The inner real self , the split personality – A dreamer of another life – all the internal feelings of recharging life to live again as a new you. In the end nothing changes as we are all different people at different times. To me your story was a great and raw wake up call I love fiction.
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Thanks so much, James. I’m always fascinated by how others read a story
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I would say he had released the hounds or the Kraken, but I’ll refrain. A little Jekyll to his Hyde. Fun piece.
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Thanks, Stu
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The Strange Case of Mr Hyde and Mr Hyde?
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Lo we have set foot on an unknown shore and found a footprint, and it was our own
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Harold Bloom once referred to the six.characters.in.search.of.an.author syndrome, where a character can escape his text and assume a real life of his own. Who knows? Perchance an author can become his alias too
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It happens all the time.
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Put him back on the page, until you feel strong enough to control him, 🙂
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Thanks, Michael. Umm, you do know this is a story? I’m not my character
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I know. If all that my pen put upon the pages of my book was true, I would be locked up ten time over.
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Yes! Love it. I can definitely believe that a writer’s alter ego, nom de plume, etc, can take over. I guess it’s bad though when the alter ego is a better lover. 🙂
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Thanks so much, Sascha
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Stellar opening line, followed by a twisted tale, or maybe not ~ this line in particular “wriggling white in the pupal case.” What an odd position to be in. To be two people at once, one seemingly a bit more fun than the other when the other is the original person. Whew! That’s confusing.
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Thanks so much Alicia. One day I’ll just write a crime caper. But not today
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Your story packed a punch–no pun intended. 🙂 Loved it!
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Thanks so much, Jan
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Maybe he should get to know this one that has taken over… they might come to terms 😉
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This town ain’t big enough
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I think you may be right 😉
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Mid-life crisis or possessed by a demon? Great story!
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Aren’t those the same thing? Thanks so much
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Oy. First one I’ve read, and now I’m nervous about reading the rest!
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Be brave
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As long as he’s your inner self, let him stay 🙂
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Thanks Liz, but it’s not my decision. I’m not the protagonist
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Oooo a bit of a Jekyll and Hyde here. Interesting. Would like more I think
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Thanks, Laurie. If Rochelle gives us the right prompts, he may be back
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😊
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A very creative take on the prompt! The character he created comes to life and takes over. I’d like a younger, more active character to take over for me. =)
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Thanks Brenda. I think you just put your lips together and blow
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Great story. I liked the whole split personality thing you’ve drawn there. I only wish you’d let him linger for some more time.
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Thanks so much. Maybe, one day, I’ll write an expanded version
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Please do. It would be an interesting read I am sure.
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Omg.. I am still reading your story the 3rd time and getting into thoughts .. 😁😁
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A writer can’t ask for more. Thanks so much
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ahhh – nice psychology twist
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Thanks so ,much
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Brilliant. Love it. He would make a wonderful subject for a psychiatric study, unless he is a psychiatrist of course (too long in the job, and all that)!
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Thanks, Sarah
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Interesting approach to this weeks prompt. No doubt this character can be taken to great heights in a longer write. A psychological drama would be superb. Loved this Neil.
Isadora 😎
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Thanks so much, Isadora
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Still creeped out a bit by the pupa image: doesn’t that bother the wife at all?😊
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I’m not sure she shares his perception
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I like your story very much – imaginative take,charged with energy. Who is the ‘real’ him I’m wondering.
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Thanks so much. Maybe there is no “real” him
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Just cut his face off, all will be well again 🙂
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Ah, yes. But that would make him phantom of the opera and we’d be off again
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A wonderful take Neil! I started writing much later in life instigated by (horror of horrors) a television serial. And hence the pen name and am often taken aback by the things Dahlia does….
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Thanks, Dahlia. Are you a little proud of her too?
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Yes! And she is so much more fun than I and am terrified of losing her🤞🙄😁
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Extreme measures indeed. Love the shock sentence.
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Thanks, Patrick
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See this is why I didn’t use a pen name. Plain dangerous. Who knows what sordid sub-personality will take over? I loved this Neil. So different than your usual stuff.
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Thanks, Fatima. I’m curious. Why do you think this is different from my usual stuff?
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It felt more fast-paced and direct. With a punch at the end. 😉
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That’s such an interesting comment. Thanks, Fatima
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I can’t let my wife read this. She’ll be wanting me to take up a pen name.
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At least it would be a lover you could trust. Couldn’t you?
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Maybe, but I’m afraid he’d enjoy it too much.
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His wife is certainly happy, so what’s the problem? 😉
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From her point of view, absolutely no problem
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Quite harrowing. Great tale.
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Thanks so much, Lisa
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Love the idea of that wriggle inside the pupal case – an unsettling form of growth. I suppose the question is whether the original likes the new version and feels like a case of needing to embrace the pen name incarnation, or kill him off completely. Maybe it comes down to who makes the most money and has most readers.
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Set against that, there is the small question of who his wife loves
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