Friday Fictioneers – The Knock


It cannot be so terrible, so decisive. Look! The sparrows continue their squabbling in the branches. A thin rain is falling, like yesterday, warm and gentle. The sun continues its climb up the wall of the sky as always, and the water plays in the fountain.

Nothing decisive has happened. When the summons comes, I will open the door.


Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

70 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – The Knock

  1. This is rather a wonderful little story. The pace is gentle, and yet that last line hit me at 90 mph. “When the summons comes, I will open the door.” That’s no mere summons; that’s existence itself. It’s hard to say this without sounding as if I’m teasing or being snide, but the writing here is so beautiful, so elegant, that this is literary flash fiction. Kudos, Neil, kudos!

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  2. Neil, I really love the way the MC looks to nature for assessing threat level. I can see where the thought of something “abnormal” happening in the context of a “normal” day would be unthinkable. So well done.

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  3. Such peace in the beginning of this wee tale, well, all the way through. (I always find solace in nature.) You draw the reader in with such softness ~ may I say that? ~ then, The Summons. You left me wondering what’s next. Very well penned.

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