
You ask what I meant, and I tell you frankly that I cannot say. When it lived inside me, I knew its shape and smell. But, speaking, I expelled it for you.
I gave it legs to travel, though, inside me, it had no limbs. Wealth it carries in its pockets to pay its way. And I gave it voices to speak, though the language is one not known to me. All of this I did so you might know it. Life becomes something else when spoken.
So, instead, I ask you to tell me what I meant.
Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here
Lovely!
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Thanks, Reena
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An interesting piece of internal dialogue. An idea germinating in the mind, can you let it grow and flourish to maturity?
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Thanks, James. I think I’ll keep it bonsai
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And you claim you don’t write poetry! Terrific writing.
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That made me laugh. Jilly. I used to write nothing but poetry. I don’t now. Thanks so much
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A very interesting piece about the inner workings of the mind.
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Thanks, Lisa. I’m not sure it’s as deep as being about the inner workings of the mind
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Very poetic, beautiful.
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Thanks so much, Jennifer
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A thoughtful piece, which I’m still trying to understand. I think the phrase “life becomes something else when spoken” distracts me from where I thought it was going. Beautifully written.
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Thanks for that feedback on the “trip”, Sandra. I’ll think on that
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For me it talks of the limitations of language, sometimes it cannot express or do justice to the meaning or feelings we are trying to communicate.
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Or sometimes it expresses something quite different than what we meant
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That was a lovely piece of writing – so imaginative and thought provoking!
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thanks so much, Susan
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I often have to articulate a thing before I understand it. In my mind, concepts are so nebulous. Pinning them down with words gives them shape and meaning, although not the right one. It’s a bit like describing dreams. The description falls far short, yet becomes the dream itself.
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Or catching running water in a bucket. In a bucket it’s always still
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So, tell me what you mean by this… 😉 Very well written.
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Thanks so much Trent
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This reads as though you subscribe to Derrida’s philosophy. No matter what the written words say, every reader will take something different from a text. No text has an absolute meaning.
Beautifully concise, and written in a style that well reflects the thought at the core of the story.
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Thanks, Penny. I don’t think anyone subscribes to Derrida’s views now. I always did think there was a clear difference between Shakespeare and the Beano.
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Haha! Quite so – and wittily put!
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For me this is a challenging piece, which is great.
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Thanks, Michael
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It’s beautiful and poetic and I have no idea what it means.
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That’s okay. Neither does he
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I read it as a depiction of a story or other work of art, coming into being, and taking on a life of its own apart from its creator.
I always hate it when those who speak about art tend to ascribe details from the writer’s life to the work. Sometimes the two couldn’t be further from one another. Well said, even if, in the middle, i had flashbacks of the movie “Alien.”😊
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I like that interpretation
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Neil, you’ve outdone yourself with this one. I have to admit, I’m totally stumped. I’m breaking my own rule, reading other posts before I do my own, looking for inspiration. You’ve helped give me a nudge.
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If you’re stumped, I don’t think I can have done too well
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No, no–you helped me get UNstuck 🙂
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Very poetic and thought-provoking.
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Thanks so much
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Oh very nice. That clarity of a final line asking for explaination. Well done
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Thanks so much, Laurie
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Dear Neil,
If you know what you meant it’s good enough for me.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle
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This is along the lines of the teaching at Lincoln Center: Observe only, no narrative. Then react. There is no wrong answer. The artist has their interpretation. We all have our own.
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I like to think there is a narrative there
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Yes, there is. The observation and interpretation the viewer has is important to the person with the inner dialogue. POV’s differ.
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I completely empathized with this especially ” Life becomes something else when spoken.” I like to take a more literal approach – I find the value of that which is close to our hearts is diminished if spoken out loud.
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Or maybe just changed, not diminished
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Yes changed would be right word 🙂
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You’ve certainly got everyone thinking – if you know what I mean!
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Don’t get you, mate
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Loved the language, only possibly understood.
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Thanks, Liz
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Ahhhh …. inside …. deep inside the mind of Neil.
I feel I’ve entered but there’s much to sort. Clever and deep writing … for me.
Isadora 😎
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Thanks so much, Isadora. Have you by any chance found my glasses while you were in there?
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There’s a few more boxes to look through. I’ll let you know. ~~~ : – )
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I really have no idea what that is about, it reminds me that I will never understand the last 20 minutes of 2001 a space odyssey. Somethings can just be beautiful and need no explanation!
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My apologies. I didn’t set out to write something obscure. But I’m glad you found it beautiful
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Poetic obfuscation at its best 🙂
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Thanks. I think. Or did you just insult me?
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Ha ha ha, no one understood much, but it sounded lovely 🙂
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A very philosophical take on the prompt. Great internal dialogue.
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Thanks so much
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I enjoy reading the other interpretations as much as I enjoyed reading this.
A very thoughtful piece.
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I enjoyed reading them as much as I enjoyed writing it. Thanks, Dawn
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Sounds like a good idea 😉
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Chinese whispers with only two people
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Wonderful. The comments from fellow FFers often give meaning to a story I had not intended or seen, which makes me realise I sometimes forget to take account of how others use language. Disappointingly, your piece also reminds me of the arguments I have with my husband when we spend ages not understanding what the other is saying, only to conclude we were saying the same thing all along, only in a completely different way.
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Thanks so much, Sarah Ann. Good luck with the arguments
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A symbol, not expressed, is pointless.
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I think maybe much of our thought is symbolic
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All of life is symbolism too
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