The Scrivener’s Forge 2: Character, Desire, and Plot

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A new writing exercise every month. When you focus on one aspect of writing at a time, you can concentrate on making it the best you can possibly create. That way you can reach a professional level that may be harder with longer works. We’ll explore one aspect of the craft each month.

If you comment on other writers’ efforts, they’ll usually comment on yours. So you get lots of critiques, advice, and encouragement.

Please don’t post your entry in comments here. Create your entry on your own blog, and then click <“An InLinkz Link-up“> to join the link-up and read other people’s work.

Character Desire and Plot

Plots engage our interest, but characters engage our hearts. For a story to grip the reader, the main character must undergo change. Once you have a character with a desire, you have a plot. The plot is about how the character struggles to overcome obstacles and achieve their desire, or fails to do so.

Exercise:

Think of a character. Then ask yourself: what does this character want?  What is stopping them achieving their desire? What must they do to overcome these obstacles?  Write a brief scene, the climax of the story, in which your character confronts the obstacles.

Friday Fictioneers – Model T

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PHOTO PROMPT © Al Forbes

Henry vanished and was gone two years. I no longer worried – he’d turn up full of tales with that impish grin.

“It’s alright for you,” I’d complained, “you disappear and you come back. For me, it’s just waiting.”

Henry never waited for anything and didn’t understand. He re-appeared in summer ‘49, pockets stuffed with Tudor trinkets.

“Damn thing overshot again,” he said.

“One day you’ll arrive and I won’t be here.”

“Nah, Izzy, you’d never leave me.”

“One day I’ll be dead. Please, buy a modern model that returns you where you started.”

“Time travel should be an adventure. Old machines have character.”

 

Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wissoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here.

Fancy sharpening your skill with writing exercises? The Scrivener’s Forge offers a new exercise every month to hone one aspect of your craft. Take a look at this month’s exercise here

Friday Fictioneers – Illumination

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PHOTO PROMPT © Dale Rogerson

Eyes watering with strain Brother Eadfrith bent over the parchment, retracing in ink the silverpoint outlines. His back ached. Late afternoon light slanting low through the casement cast a shadow, and he shifted the sheet of vellum on the oak desk.

With delicate brush, he applied the ochre border and then crimson for the saint’s robes and animal’s coats.  Finally, he laid gold leaf onto the capitals. The sun touched the page, and beauty clasped the text. Lines of fire connected hidden meaning that sparked from image to sentence, from intricately scribed knot to ornate capital – earth, ladder, heaven.

 

Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wissoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here.

Fancy sharpening your skill with writing exercises? The Scrivener’s Forge offers a new exercise every month to hone one aspect of your craft. Take a look at this month’s exercise here

Friday Fictioneers – Staying Put

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Photo Prompt: (C) C E Ayr

She found him yet again wandering through the station.

At least he looked embarrassed. “A station at night is beautiful,” he said. “Calming. So few people, but the dedication of an empty temple. Victorian railway stations are one of three British contributions to world civilisation.”

Alice followed his gaze to the great glass roof and shared the awe. Her hand crept into his.

“Arrivals and departures. When I was a boy, smoke billowed under that canopy, like mist on the hills.”

Alice squeezed his hand. “You’re good at comings and goings – it’s just the stays that trouble you.”

 

Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find It here

Fancy sharpening your skill with writing exercises? The Scrivener’s Forge offers a new exercise every month to hone one aspect of your craft. Take a look at this month’s exercise here

Spin Cycle

This is my response to the first Scrivener’s Forge exercise. Click on the link to see the exercise details. Click here to see other responses.

 

Sarah leans in close as her friend adopts a conspiratorial whisper. The clatter of cutlery and the hum made by the chatter of two hundred students masks the confession.

“I know Malky must love me because of what he does.”

Sarah leers, with what she believes is a woman-of-the world grin. “Why? What does he do?”

“He brings me his washing.”

Sarah blinks.

Her friend sees the blink and frowns, “That’s intimate, right?”

“Malky’s knickers, yeah. Very intimate.”

“Well there you go – he wouldn’t do that if he didn’t love me, would he?”

Sarah scratches her temple. “Sounds like a bond.”

“And he does other things too.”

The pause is masterly, leaving Sarah no choice but to arch an eyebrow and ask.

“Malky doesn’t like going out. Always wants to stay in. Like, together – just us.”

“Is he … is it … I mean, is it good?”

Sarah’s friend giggles. “A bit quick. But then boys are, aren’t they?”

“Does he go again?”

“Sometimes, but usually he falls asleep and I watch telly.”

Friday Fictioneers – the Miller’s Daughter

Fancy sharpening your skill with writing exercises? The Scrivener’s Forge offers a new exercise every month to hone one aspect of your craft. Take a look at this month’s exercise here

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Photo Prompt: (C) Sandra Crook

Sound accompanied Yasmin’s days – sails creaking, gears clanking, and grindstones gnashing. Yasmin feared silence. Though the wheels inside her made no sound, sometimes she gritted her teeth.

“I’m not pretty,” she acknowledged to her suitor, “but I won’t sell myself cheap – I know the worth of my inheritance.”

“Silly girl,” said Damasos, and his mirth was like wind in sails. “Mills hold no interest for me. Our fate together lies in palaces far away.”

A Prince! As the soothsayer foretold!

Sitting together beside the hearth, old and content, Damasos laughed his laugh. “Did I actually say I was a Prince?”

 

Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find It here.

The Scrivener’s Forge 1

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A new writing exercise every month. When you focus on one aspect of writing at a time, you can concentrate on making it the best you can possibly create. That way you can reach a professional level that may be harder with longer works. We’ll explore one aspect of the craft each month.

If you comment on other writers’ efforts, they’ll usually comment on yours. So you get lots of critiques, advice, and encouragement.

Pleaase don’t post your entry in comments here. Create your entry on your own blog, and then click the little blue frog to join the link-up and read other people’s work..

1. Drawing from life

Observing and listening are key tools in a writer’s arsenal. Sit somewhere public and eavesdrop on a conversation.  Listen not only for interesting stories, but also turns of phrase and mannerisms.

Exercise

Turn some of what you hear into a short love story, not longer than 500 words. You may need to do a lot of twisting and reforging of the dialogue to make this work.

Friday Fictioneers – At Pat’s

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PHOTO PROMPT © Shaktiki Sharma

Arms outstretched like a superhero, there was my Doug preparing to bungee jump. Seems it wasn’t all work at that conference. I hit the reply button, and my phone offered “how fun!” as an instant response. Though ungrammatical, I accepted.

Doug’s next message came. “Having a great time apart.”

“Real class,” I typed, “dumping me over the phone. Whatever. I’ve been wanting you out of my life anyhow.”

There followed a long pause. Then “Screw you. That was autocorrect. Meant to type at Pat’s, not apart. I’ll collect my things next week.”

 

Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here.

Friday Fictioneers – The Test

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PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot

It was the only diner for fifty miles.

“Patriots’ Diner? No way I’m going in there,” April said as I swung off the highway.

Of course, I understood why.  “C’mon hun, I’m starving.”

Her arms folded, hugged herself, perhaps to hold in the anger. April didn’t like arguments but, once started, the woman could be meaner than a weasel in a trap.

“Why don’t you stay here and I’ll fetch something,” I suggested. “Burger?”

“If you think you can pass the patriotism test.”

The tone was sweet, but I knew she was setting a test of her own.

Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here.

83. My secret formula for flash fiction

I’ve been writing Friday Fictioneers, hundred-word stories, for three quarters of a year now. That adds up to 40 stories, each of which has been peer-assessed. I wondered what I could learn from analysing those assessments. Which tales garnered the greatest response and what was distinct about them?

The number of people reading varies each week, depending on season, and whether there’s a public holiday. So totalling the reads doesn’t tell you much.  The average number of reads was just under 91 per story, ranging from 123 for last week’s offering to 40 for my first one.

There is a better way of understanding which stories resonated. I calculated the proportion of likes and comments per read, and then analysing the narrative characteristics.  Eight stood out as garnering above-average likes and comments – After the Asteroid, Lovers, Parting, The Cellist, Leaving, Mud, The Fury, and The Curtain.

A spoonful of medicine helps the sugar go down

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Of these eight “winners”, four were sad – almost half of all the sad stories I’ve written. By contrast, only one of the eight was sweet – 16% of the sweet stories.  So tragedy wins.  “Sadly beautiful” was a comment on After the Asteroid, which deals with dementia and which received the highest ratio of comments and likes to views.

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Relationships are essential

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These “winners” also included half my stories about lovers, and a fifth of those about family. No surprise there – relationships are central to a good tale.  Of Parting, one commentator wrote, “’Some moments are so perfect they deserve to be protected from life’s corrosion.’ Oh, what a lovely line! Something to live by.”

Violence

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Violence was also a key feature. It occurred in three of the eight “winners” (half my stories that contain violence). The Cellist (see below) features the survivor of an atrocity. One reader said “This is wonderful, sometimes I think that music played from pain is even more beautiful.”

Art or artists

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Stories featuring art or artists made up only a tenth of my output, but half of them were among the “winners”. That may reflect the fact that many of the readers are other writers. One reader of the story Abstract, which was not among the “winners”, reflected this, writing “Clever analogy of what we try to do with 100-word stories.”

Story elements that lose

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Story themes that did not feature strongly or attracted below-average likes and comments included politics and philosophy, science fiction and fantasy, and travel. That surprised me, since these are major genres. Perhaps I just don’t write them that well, though I like to think I do.

Combination works

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A hundred words is not much. Yet the analysis shows the importance of complexity. Six of my stories included three or more elements. Of these, four were in the group of “winners”. The Cellist combines violence, art, sadness and transcendence. Of the 16 stories with just a single element, only one, The Fury, a horror story, featured among the “winners.”

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The secret formula

So if you want to write a successful flash story, combine sadness, violence, relationships and art. But maybe only if you’re me. Your winning formula may be different.