182. Retelling Ancient Myths: Emily Wilson’s Sumerians

Emily H. Wilson has performed a heroic feat of retelling in her Sumerian trilogy.

If you were setting out to retell a classic tale from the ancient world, you’d have many problems to surmount. Understanding the customs and meanings of that world would not be simple. But, more than this, you’d come to realise that what constitutes a story was also different in the olden days. There are many cultural reasons for this, but fundamentally they boil down to one thing. Fiction had not yet been invented, and, as we’ll see, would not be invented until the twelve century of the current era, at least in the West. Almost certainly, earlier stories were intended to be received as descriptions of events, as histories.

Consider what Beowulf, the Icelandic Sagas, The Iliad, and The Odyssey all have in common—they are tales of heroic deeds. There are heroes and monsters, but all these characters are “flat”. By that I mean, they have no internal life. We occasionally see their reactions to things—love, anger, grief—in between the slaying, but we don’t have access to their thoughts and feelings. And, of course, we wouldn’t if these are intended to be understood as true accounts. Everyone knows the bittersweet sadness of never being able to know what goes on in another person’s head and heart. It would therefore be absurd to pretend to know what was in Achilles’ mind or Beowulf’s. Such a conceit would break the reader’s or listener’s belief in the story. Nor was there any reason to wonder what was in the hero’s mind. It follows logically from their character. When Achilles mourns the death of Patrocles by dragging around Hector’s body—an offence to men and gods—the listener understood it as an expression of his heroic character.

Nor is there ever any doubt that Odysseus will free himself from Circe’s spell, reject her, and continue on to be reunited with his wife, Penelope. To do anything else would be a disharmony in the tale and a contradiction of his fundamental nature.

We are so used to fiction now that we don’t remark on its strangeness. To us, there is nothing remarkable about this passage from Jane Austen’s Pride and Prejudice:

Darcy only smiled; and the general pause which ensued made Elizabeth tremble lest her mother should be exposing herself again. She longed to speak, but could think of nothing to say…” 

Yet here we are inside Elizabeth’s mind, experiencing what she experiences, though it is betrayed by no action. For fiction to come into existence, with its pretence that we can live inside another person’s thoughts and feelings and, indeed, believe that there is anything worthy of interest in those thoughts and feelings, several things have to happen.

These conditions are eloquently argued by Laura Ashe in her 2018 article The Medieval Invention of Fiction. They came together in Europe, and specifically England, in the twelfth century.  There came into existence a class of people, the feudal elite. with the wealth and the leisure to become patrons of storytelling. In medieval England, this elite was educated in French, English and Latin. Before the Norman conquest, Anglo Saxon literature had cared nothing for individuals or their wants. What mattered was that the warrior held his place in the shield wall and made good on his boasts in the mead hall. Ango-Norman feudalism overturned this, celebrating the individual knight for his own sake.  At the same time, theological interpretation of the nature of sin began to move from the act to consideration of the intention. This opened the way to interest in the interior life and a consideration of selfhood.  Selfhood, Ashe points out, is not yet individuality, and the Church was, indeed, profoundly suspicious of the prideful sin of individualism. The final piece of the puzzle is the invention of “courtly love”. Note, she is not saying that love did not exist in the literature of previous ages. It did, but often as an ambivalent, or even destructive, force that distracts the hero from his duty.

Courtly love was a new thing, a new idea, carried in the songs of the troubadours. Love becomes the purpose of the knight’s actions. The duty the knight owes to his liege lord becomes metaphorically displaced to submission to his lady.  Ashe writes.

“Love takes the place of the higher cause which the hero serves and yet simultaneously represents his own self-fulfilment as the ultimate goal of the narrative. Now and only now is fiction made possible, for now the individual is justified for his own sake; his achievement of self-fulfilment is enough in itself to feed narrative representation. The love-plot is fictional, for it requires attention to the inner lives of at least two distinguishable individuals and asserts that their emotional experience, in the author’s imagination, is valuable for its own sake. This is the literary paradigm which gives us the novel: access to the unknowable inner lives of others, moving through a world in which their interior experience is as significant as their exterior action.”

So, how now does an author retell a classic tale that is both modern and yet true to the original? The core of the problem lies in how to give interiority to the flat characters of the ancients. Emily H. Wilson faced this dilemma in writing her retelling of the Sumerian Epic of Gilgamesh.  This epic is perhaps the earliest written story in the history of literature, coming down to us in cuneiform inscribed on clay tablets. Before talking about Wilson’s magnificent books (two volumes of her trilogy have now been published), let me say something about the original story.

Gilgamesh is a hero, so what he does is the work of heroes. He braves perils, he slays monsters, he treats with gods and goddesses (being two thirds god himself). The Sumerian version of the epic comes down to us in five fragmentary tales on clay tablets. The later Akkadian version collects together some of these tales and includes others. The goddess Innana makes brief appearances in this epic, and becomes central to Wilson’s retelling. Innana is a seriously cool and long-lived deity. She is not only the goddess of love, but also the goddess of war, is later known as Ishtar, and survives all the way into the classical period as Aphrodite and Venus. The relationship between Gilgamesh, King of Uruk, and Innana varies from tale to tale. In Gilgamesh, Enkidu and the Netherworld Innana is Gilgamesh’s sister. By the time we get to Gilgamesh and the Bull of Heaven, she is his jealous foe, thwarted in her desire for Gilgamesh. In Wilson’s version, the two are allies and sometimes lovers, though their paths rarely cross. To be clear, it’s not that Gilgamesh lacks character. In fact, a surfeit of character is what distinguishes ancient literary figures. They do what they do because that is their character. To quote Virginia Woolf in her essay On Not Knowing Greek,

“In six pages of Proust we can find more complicated and varied emotions than in the whole of Electra.  But in the Electra or in the Antigone we are impressed by something different, by something perhaps more impressive–by heroism itself, by  fidelity itself.  In spite of the labour and the difficulty, it is this that draws us back and back to the Greeks; the stable, the  permanent, the original human being is to be found there.”

Ancient protagonists need no internal life because their motives are inscribed in their character, which, in turn, expresses archetypes rather than individual people. So Gilgamesh has emotions and traits. He starts the Epic of Gilgamesh, as a cruel and capricious ruler. The gods punish him by creating the wild man, Enkidu to humble him. The pair wrestle and Gilgamesh prevails, but they develop a bromance, setting out on adventures to prove their mettle. When Gilgamesh spurns Innana’s advances, she unleashes the Bull of Heaven against him and Enkidu. Because they slay the Bull of Heaven, one of them must die, and the gods decree the victim must be Enkidu. Gilgamesh mourns his friend, travelling into the wilderness dressed in animal skins. So far so intelligible. The proud man finds love, loses love, and is humbled by his grief. But none of this is really motivation in the modern sense. The ending of the Epic makes this clear. Gilgamesh seeks out Utnapishtim, survivor of the great flood and the only mortal men on whom the gods bestowed immorality. He wants to learn the secret of immortality. Why does he do this? Not, surely, so that his grief can endure through all the ages of Man. Rather, it’s a result of his nature: born part god, part mortal man, he seeks immortality. His quest need not be driven by any internal dialogue—it’s given in what he is.

How then does Wilson animate and flesh out Gilgamesh? Her retelling follow four main characters: Gilgamesh, Innana, Ninshubar (Innan’s vizier and a goddess herself); and Marduk (of whom more later). Wilson’s Gilgamesh is a bit of a Jack-the-lad—cheeky, cheerful, and trying his luck. But, as Wilson tells us herself, it was the desire to resuscitate Innana that motivated her. And why not, indeed? Innana is probably the great survivor among the ancient gods. Worshipped in Sumer around 4,000 BCE, she became Ishtar to the conquering Akkadians, Astarte to the Egyptians, and then Aphrodite and Venus to the Greeks and Romans. Her cult survived until around the fourth or fifth century of the current era.

Whereas Gilgamesh leaps from the page, Innana is on a slower burn, only gradually becoming herself. She starts the trilogy as a child, aware that she is the goddess of love, but not yet the goddess of war. This contradictory nature is a gift to any modern storyteller. At first, Innana is docile, sexually abused by her grandfather and then handed over as wife to an oafish husband. Relatively passive and indeed weakened after her descent into the underworld, she is dependent on Ninshubar’s help and vigilance. Only gradually does she come into herself, becoming something powerful and terrible towards the end of the second book. Ninshubar is the most exotic of the main characters, a huntress from the far south, wild and mortal-born who becomes a goddess only after being saved from death. And Marduk is the most mysterious. Pale-skinned and red-haired, he is rescued and adopted and then lost again to Ninshubar, who spends much of the first two books seeking him. He has been enslaved. But there are hints that he is much more than he seems.

It’s not all sandals and swords though. There are teasing hints of sci-fi, particularly in the underworld’s gates and the fact that it can also fly.

Gilgamesh is probably the most developed character in Wilson’s cast list. But she has other tricks up her sleeve. This is a thoroughly modern re-telling, yet it retains some of the feel of the original, with subtle nods to the Sumerian storytelling tradition. As in the original, the characters go off on quests, wandering and battling around the landscape of Sumer. And, with hints of the original, there are repeating refrains, such as Ninshubar’s “one step and then the next.”

The first book, Innana, is arguably closest to the original, incorporating several of the ancient stories. Here we get Gilgamesh’s bromance with Enkidu, and here too we get Innan’s descent into the underworld (which is the subject of a different surviving myth). The mes, which Innana steals from the god Enki in Sumerian myth, are the attributes of civilisation (positive and negative). They reappear in Wilson’s hands as mees. amulets of power. The cities and fields of ancient Sumer are there, the temples and palaces, even the smells.

By book two, Gilgamesh, great forces are in motion, devastating the lives of the humans and gods of Sumer. Sumer’s enemies overrun the city states and we learn that the gods, the Annunaki, are not the only gods in Heaven. Another, older, group of gods seek revenge on their kin.  Here too, Wilson draws on antique sources, plaiting together stories that ran through Mesopotamian legend, creating a huge mythological landscape. The Enuma Elish is the earliest complete creation myth that has come down to us. In this myth, the primordial being, Tiamat, Mother of All Things, fights her grandchildren and is overthrown by her grandson, Marduk. By the end of the second of Wilson’s book, Tiamat is there and seems to have declared war on the Annunaki. My bet is that Marduk is going to slay her in the final book of the trilogy. 

Friday Fictioneers – Honest Abe

PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff

I could always tell what Abe was thinking, as if a fluffy cartoon bubble floated above his head. Probably, you read it on his face and body language. In a kinder world, such transparency would be admirable, celebrated perhaps, but in this one, it was a liability. All his life, people duped Abe and took advantage of him, even me.

That late Thursday night, I didn’t need the scent of gardenias on his shirt—the smell of guilt reeked stronger. “Who is she?”

“What do you want?”

“The house.”

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

Friday Fictioneers – That’s the Way to Do It

PHOTO PROMPT © Sandra Crook

The tide will carry her off. In the nature of things, there should have been a line of torches. There should have been a shield wall of warriors beating their chests and women wailing. There should have been a funeral barge aflame, drifting out to the Underworld.

Drama. that’s what this needed. She was so vibrant, always larger than life. But, ah, not with a bang but a whimper, as the poet says. At least I was here to dispatch her.

I lay the club reverently on her chest and walk away.

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

Friday Fictioneers – Say What You See

PHOTO PROMPT © Lisa Fox

He waited. Of course, I knew the answer he wanted to the question, but I wasn’t  going to offer the satisfaction.

“Eyes,” I said.

“What?”

“All of them have eyes.”

HIs sigh gave me huge pleasure. With a mouth drawn into a tight line, he said, “That’s just a trick of the light.”

The lips, or lack thereof, were the thing you noticed first about him. Mother had always said to never trust a man without lips.

“So, what I see is an illusion, but what you see is real?” I knew this would drive him crazy.

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

Friday Fictioneers – Little Boxes

PHOTO PROMPT © David Stewart

Her life compressed down until it fitted into ten square feet—eighteen storage boxes. How could someone so vibrant and alive have become so small? Was that party there? The one where she had walked a wire between buildings. That smile and infectious laugh wasn’t there, the way a whole room wanted to crowd around her. Ten square miles insufficient to hold her.

Perhaps the enormous pressure had squeezed her into a new dense form of matter which warped space and time. I closed the door om the storage room but remained unable to escape her event horizon.

 .Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

Friday Fictioneers – Sadie

PHOTO PROMPT © Dale Rogerson

Sadie had character, I’ll give her that.

“OK, I’m no looker,” she’d say, “but folk never forget me.”

Idiosyncracy sprouted on that woman like barnacles on a rusting hulk. For the longest time, I believed they were affectations and disdained Sadie. Stop trying so hard and just be yourself, for chrissakes, I’d mutter.

Only gradually did I come to realise this was her true self: disheveled clown, eccentric mimic of opinions and garbs, eclectic jigsaw of habits.

In May, I bought the ring and went down on one knee. “Marry me?”

“Hell, no.”

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

181. The Shape of Stories II: Assessing similarity in stories

You’ve had the experience, I’m sure, of reading a new story and thinking, “I’ve read this before.” What similarity creates this sense? In part, it’s the shape of the story arc. Some time ago, I wrote a post about the shape of stories. Stories with similar arcs can feel similar. Think of the rags-to-riches trope.

Or the “man-in-a-hole” trope of the overcoming of adversity.

Such simple diagrams give us a sense of the story arc. Other methods are available[1].

In the simple examples above, which come from Kurt Vonnegut, the shapes are made by the changes in the protagonist’s fortunes over time. And this corresponds roughly with what we mean by plot.

But what of other features of stories, irrespective of plot? For example, the personality of the lead characters, the tempo (pace) of the story, or the complexity and imagery of vocabulary? The first of these is often characteristic of series, where characters recur. The next two have more to do with the distinctive “voice” or style of an author. Might stories with similar plot arcs feel different to readers? Or might radically different plot arcs feel similar?

I decided to run a chapter from the novel I’m working on, The People of the Bull, through several text analysers. Here’s a sample of the opening:

The day Hecta, my mechter’s mechter, died much like to any other day was. Listen and I will tell. My mechter, Serega, and Iennos, zirs brechter, the flocks tended. Hecta’s mate Arcu, my mechter’s pichter, nothing knew and in the far valleys the great tawros stalking was. Yes, ill Hecta was, but sickness common is. Most recover.  But being ended and becoming arrived.  The shaking sickness it was, and many in the weyk that dreadful spring, sudden as a wykwos, it carried off.”

The oddity of the language is deliberate. The story is set eight thousand years in the past, and the vocabulary and the grammar are a simulation of the language these people may have spoken: Proto-Indo-European.

None of the analytical engines commented on this oddity. The “I Write Like” engine decided, improbably, that I wrote like J.K. Rowling. Readability Formulas assessed it as readable at around fifth grade level and as having above average lexical density (measures the proportion of lexical words—nouns, adjectives, verbs, and adverbs—to the total number of words.) and below average word diversity.

ProWritingAid is arguably one of the more sophisticate tools. It identified that words like mechter were unknown, and calculated average sentence length at 11.15 words with a good variety of lengths.  For comparison, texts generally have an average sentence length of 8.2 words. J.K. Rowling’s average sentence length is 17.45 words (so, not very similar).

I was, perhaps, more similar to Salman Rushdie whose sentences averaged 14.95 words.

I was also significantly less dialogue rich than Rowling, but more than Rushdie.

It also scored writing style[2] as 86% and engagement at 93%. It yielded the following word cloud for the first five chapters:

The pacing  shows slow paced text alternating with faster paced.

So what can tools like ProWritingAid tell us about the similarities and differences between stories? They can analyse some of the elements of the language used: are the sentences short or long? How complex are they? How much of the story is dialogue?  Here is a comparison from ProWritingAid  and Readability Formulas of the similarities and differences of my story with works of some other writers.

 MeAverageJ.K RowlingSalaman RushdieAnthony DoerrBill BrysonZora Neale Hurson
Sentence length11.15 words8.2 words17.45 words14.95 words11.6  words15.7 words12.95 words
Sentence variety6.7?5.510.58.110.75.0
Conjunction starts9.5%1.5%5.6%8.7%4.8%5,2%8.7%
Dialogue52%20%64%39%39%30%48%
Lexical density55.3%45%47.25%55.2%58.4%53.1%60.5%
Lexical diversity34.3%45%  58.1%46.3%  62.2%  50.647.1%  

You can see that on none of the indicators is my writing much like that of J.K. Rowling. Most similar, overall, of the writers examined here, is Zora Neale Hurston. This may be because of her extensive use of dialect and substantial use of dialogue, but also, like me, she is prone to start sentences with a conjunction (such as “and” or “but”).  Here is a sample of her writing from the opening of her wonderful book Their Eyes Were Watching God.

Ships at a distance have every man’s wish on board. For some they come in with the tide. For others they sail forever on the horizon, never out of sight, never landing until the Watcher turns his eyes away in resignation, his dreams mocked to death by Time. That is the life of men.

Now, women forget all those things they don’t want to remember, and remember everything they don’t want to forget. The dream is the truth. Then they act and do things accordingly.

So the beginning of this was a woman and she had come back from burying the dead. Not the dead of sick and ailing with friends at the pillow and the feet. She had come back from the sodden and the bloated; the sudden dead, their eyes flung wide open in judgment.

The people all saw her come because it was sundown. The sun was gone, but he had left his footprints in the sky. It was the time for sitting on porches beside the road. It was the time to hear things and talk. These sitters had been tongueless, earless, eyeless conveniences all day long. Mules and other brutes had occupied their skins. But now, the sun and the bossman were gone, so the skins felt powerful and human. They became lords of sounds and lesser things. They passed nations through their mouths. They sat in judgment.

Seeing the woman as she was made them remember the envy they had stored up from other times. So they chewed up the back parts of their minds and swallowed with relish. They made burning statements with questions, and killing tools out of laughs. It was mass cruelty. A mood come alive, Words walking without masters; walking altogether like harmony in a song.

“What she doin coming back here in dem overhalls? Can’t she find no dress to put on? – Where’s dat blue satin dress she left here in? – Where all dat money her husband took and died and left her? – What dat ole forty year ole ‘oman doin’ wid her hair swingin’ down her back lak some young gal? Where she left dat young lad of a boy she went off here wid? – Thought she was going to marry? – Where he left her? – What he done wid all her money? – Betcha he off wid some gal so young she ain’t even got no hairs – why she don’t stay in her class?”


[1] See for example topological and other approaches such as:  Golizafeh et al (2018) Topological Signature of 19th Century Novelists: Persistent Homology in Text Mining Big Data Cogn. Comput. 2018, 2(4), 33; https://doi.org/10.3390/bdcc2040033; Lois Mooiman (2015) Comparing Stories with the use of Petri Nets,  Bachelor Thesis, University of Amsterdam https://staff.fnwi.uva.nl/b.bredeweg/pdf/BSc/20142015/Mooiman.pdf, Anni Doshi et al (2024) Generative AI enhances individual creativity but reduces the collective diversity of novel content, Science Advances 10, 28 https://www.science.org/doi/10.1126/sciadv.adn5290?adobe_mc=MCMID%3D51225740793224612401754393803669772565%7CMCORGID%3D242B6472541199F70A4C98A6%2540AdobeOrg%7CTS%3D1720804936#body-ref-R26 (which uses AI-supported text embedding to assess similarity between stories);

[2] This assesses elements like clarity, excessive adverb usage, hidden verbs, lengthy subordinate clauses, repeated sentence starts, excessive use of passive voice, and more.

Friday Fictioneers – Form and Essence

PHOTO PROMPT © Lisa Fox

He asked whether I liked the piece. I sensed a trap.

“Very modern,” I temporised.

With a creasing of brows, he asked again, more insistently. Which was rude.

“Well, let’s see. May I touch?”

Of course, he wanted to know why.

“If it’s a pile of wood shavings glued together, then no. If it’s blown glass, yes, I’d admire the skill.”

With huge disappointment, he insisted the artifice didn’t matter, only the essence of the thing. My guess—he was looking for an argument.

The door closed behind me and I was never invited back.

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

Friday Fictioneers – The Baker

PHOTO PROMPT © Ted Strutz

“Cooking,” he says, arranging utensils and ingredients on the counter, “is pretty much applied chemistry.”

Should I correct him? Things rarely go well when I do. Not that he’s violent, you understand. No, no, I’m not saying that, but he gets crotchety, and then other things unravel. Besides, is he so wrong? True, he’s forgotten how much of it is heart and discovery and flair. And also, a fair amount is physics, come to that. But, if his belief provides an illusion of mastery in a world of chaos and chance, he’ll approach the task with more confidence.

“Yes, dear.”

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

Friday Fictioneers – Rotisserie Moment

PHOTO PROMPT © Mr Binks

What the hell are those things? Frank says they’re babies, but I know he’s lying. Even so, the image sticks and I can’t get rid of it. Now I’m thinking of the illustration in my bio textbook. You remember the one—showing an embryo developing from a small tadpole creature to a little animal with arms and legs and head and dreams. Any minute now, the timer will ping, and something great and gold and terrible is going to step out into the world.

I punch Frank in the arm. “Eejit,” I say, and he grins.

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here