Min Min Challenge – The best laid plans

Are ye there, Rabbie? Could ye be? Inside this great white phallus o’ a mausoleum? I dinnae think so. It’s no the phallic symbolism I find improbable, ye ken? Aye, that would suit ye fine. Nor even the grandiloquent size (ye were aye a bit o’ a boaster, richt enough). It’s the whiteness, in a church yard o’ red sandstone needles. Rabbie, ye were a man o’ the people, champion o’ ye ain folk. Rise with the class, no above it, that’s the way o’ it for the likes of us.

But here’s the thing that really scunners me. They put a fu’ng big iron gate across the entrance. Best laid plans, is it? Aye, that’ll be richt. Ma plan, ye ken, was tae lay me doon on yer tomb. Ye were aye a randy bugger, and I was thinking wee Tam could tak me as I sprawled athwart yer deid body. That would hae been strong magic, so it would—a guaranteed pregnancy. Would that no hae tickled ye, Rabbie? Aye, course it would. Whit am I goin’ tae do wi’ wee Tam the noo?

Ach, buggrit, Tam, let’s just get a haggis supper and watch the telly.

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Written for the Min Min challenge. The prompt is Robert Burns’ “The best laid plans of mice and men gang aft agley”. You can find other contributions here

Friday Fictioneers – Empty Eyes

PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Caroll

So many years. Lost for so long, buried really. Standing before the shell of what had been our home, memory floods back. Here, we were happy. So why am I seized with dread? Why do the empty eyes of blank windows fix me with an accusing stare? Wind, that has stripped the gaunt trees of clothing, chills me. Something terrible happened here.

I remember. And I remember why I forgot. Will I be able to forget again?

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

Friday Fictioneers – Transference

PHOTO PROMPT © Na’ama Yehuda

She is my life. She gives me life. It’s us against the world. They hate her. Just like they hated mummy. But they won’t drive her to her death like they did mummy, because now I’m big enough to protect her. Fiercely. They took mummy, but they won’t take her. And, oddly, their threat makes me the man my father couldn’t be.

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

Min Min Challenge – Lights in the Sky

There are

Lights in the sky,

Teeth in the smile,

Teacakes on the plate.

Of all these,

the teacakes may be the scariest.

Of course, the lights are scary, but I don’t believe they’re really there.

Smiles are not normally frightening, but when you declare love, your teeth bare when pronouncing the word.

But the teacakes, oh, the teacakes!  

The pink and yellow icing are colours nobody should dare eat.

And, most of all, they just appeared out of nothing.

Something is happening,

A terrible annunciation.

I fear those teacakes. Because I don’t dare fear you.

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I was invited to join the Min Min challenge by the much-missed C E Ayr. The prompt is “Strange Lights in the Sky”. You can find other contributions here

Friday Fictioneers – Incident on the A9

PHOTO PROMPT © Fleur Lind

When the door in the sky opened, I wasn’t scared. Awestruck, yes, wondering if hosts of angels prepared to descend. Perhaps there were even trumpets; or that may have been the sound of engines of uncanny power reversing as beguiling visitors arrived.

“Why are you pulling over?” Mabel asked.

“Don’t you see it? Can’t you feel the rapture?”

“Shall I take over the driving?”

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

Friday Fictioneers – The Escher Staircase

PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot

Sometimes, I think the Almighty has a weird sense of humour. Take gateways, for example. Not the entrances to fancy buildings, but the wrinkles where worlds meet. Don’t deny you know what I mean. Everyone has encountered at least one, but we blank them because the altered geometry offends. We look but we unsee them.

I recognised this stairwell as a gateway by the impossible Escher steps with two dimensions folded into one. But did it have to reek so strongly of impatience? Humour, you see. I swung my leg over the railing and picked my way gingerly down.

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

Friday Fictioneers – The end of memory

PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

I’ve been making memories all my life. Videos of my first steps, the family holiday in Israel, my role as Gratiano in the school play. Then came my graduation, our wedding, that incredible boozy fortnight in Magaluf. And on and on. They told us the memories would live forever, digital ghosts on distant servers that our descendants could watch.

Over and over, I parse the e-mail from the Home Office. “Storage maximum has been reached globally. All citizens are required to delete 50% of their data.”

What to amputate?

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

Friday Fictioneers – Fire

PHOTO PROMPT © Dale Rogerson

You know this fire thing you’ve invented? Good for tenderising food, sure. But great for lighting up the dark. Tak and I used flame to explore the deep earth. The tunnel goes a long way back, a long way. Maybe forever. Maybe into the other world. It got too narrow to squeeze through. Listen, here’s the big thing. There’s a body at the end, a dead badger. And it hasn’t decomposed. If we bring our dead to the shaft, they can live on in the other world.

Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here

170. Is verbosity always bad?

Judges for the 2018 Man Booker Prize appealed to authors to edit. “Occasionally we felt that inside the book we read, was a better one – sometimes a thinner one – wildly signalling to be let out,” said chair of the judging panel, Kwame Anthony Appiah.

I have great sympathy with this appeal. A few years ago, I wrote a blog post bemoaning the sharp increase in the length of novels after 1950. I also remarked there that this is an odd phenomenon in age in which, we are told, attention  span is shortening and instant gratification is the norm.

The modern reader, confronted with this opening of Dicken’s A Tale of Two Cities, might be expected to scrawl TL;DR (too long; didn’t read) and move on:

“It was the best of times, it was the worst of times, it was the age of wisdom, it was the age of foolishness, it was the epoch of belief, it was the epoch of incredulity, it was the season of Light, it was the season of Darkness, it was the spring of hope, it was the winter of despair, we had everything before us, we had nothing before us, we were all going direct to heaven, we were all going direct the other way — in short, the period was so far like the present period, that some of its noisiest authorities insisted on its being received, for good or for evil, in the superlative degree of comparison only.”

The reason for the discrepancy between short attention span and long novels is probably that the novels I used for comparative analysis are those that received critical approval, not necessarily those from the mass market.

Though I enjoy brevity, I want to make a few points here in defence of verbosity:

  1. To be verbose is not necessarily to be imprecise. The opposite of verbose is “succinct”, not “precise”.
  2. There is pleasure to be had in lush description.
  3. Verbosity has real narrative function.

Look back at the Dickens excerpt. What is he telling us? He is writing about the era of the French revolution, and contrasting two opposed worlds: one of radical change and the other of conservative stasis. He could, of course, have just said that. Instead, he makes us experience the contradiction. In the mode of the writing coach, I might say he “shows” us, rather than “tells” us. And, surely, that is the job of the writer—to allow us to live for a moment in another’s reality.

Excessive description (with a few exceptions like the Biblical Song of Solomon) is largely absent from literature before the advent of the modem novel. Just take a look at Homer’s spare prose, if you doubt this.

The classics of earlier eras are plot-rich. There was little drive to explore the inner life of protagonists because their goodness or evil was a function of their actions, not their thoughts and feelings. These stories were created for homogeneous communities with a shared understanding of the world. So, exploration of inner worlds would have been superfluous.They also describe worlds where change generally came slowly and yesterday was much like today.

Today, many of us live in diverse communities where the pace of change is dizzyingly fast. Understanding that diversity and capturing the fleeting present is one of the functions of description in fiction.

If I want to understand you, I need to appreciate your perception and your motivation, not just your actions. We all experience things differently. And, perhaps, the modern obsession with recording everything, and of “making memories” rather than simply experiencing things, is the clue to why verbosity matters.  If the slow world of the past generated stories full of fast action, our fast world needs slow stories that capture the moments before they’re gone.

Friday Fictioneers – Rear Window

PHOTO PROMPT © Lisa Fox

There are two possibilities—the Smiths have got themselves a dog or a baby. The chewy toys drying on their line are consistent with either. Yet, there is no  barking, nor also wailing.  

I shift my plaster cast to a more comfortable position on the stool and reach for the binoculars. Nothing moves next door except Mrs Smith ironing. Whoever or whatever plays with those toys is not visible. Silent? Invisible? That can mean only one thing—a soundproof, locked room. And that can mean only one thing.

I dial. “Hello? Police? I’d like to report a kidnap gang.”

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Friday fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here